Isaiah 40:31
But they who wait for the Lord shall renew their strength; they shall mount up with wings like eagles; they shall run and not be weary; they shall walk and not faint.Hi everyone!
This is my first post and I am still apprehensive about publicizing things that I've written, especially because of the enormity of the audience.One of my professors, Aravind Sir, asked me to start a blog and hence this blog is dedicated to him.I pray to that sublime energy that sustains the universe to bestow in me the strength to keep writing, so that one day it attains a certain degree of finesse eligible for publication.
I wrote the poem below last month and I'd be really happy to get some feedback on how I can rework it.
To Christ
I abhor thy saintly eyes,
That aver no love
To souls deprived and dying.
Their gaunt faces
Bent with fatigue,
Tied and bloody
Strangely resurrect
Thy wounds of treachery.
But the end is not holy
Their cries for succour,
left unheard by apostles,
who once helped ease
Lazarus' death woes.
Has faith been betrayed
And the rosary spurned,
Or is it that we are filthy
beyond the altar's clemency?
Gud Wirk mole..keppp do writing dear
ReplyDeleteThank you Chechi!
DeleteA very nice debut post. I like how compact the poem is: short words, clipped lines. There is a sense of urgency, a terseness brought about by the agony of the speaker; agony that is directed against the perceived indifference of God. The lines, 'Strangely resurrect/Thy wounds of treachery' I especially like. You've taken the idea of resurrection which signifies hope and liberation and turned it around into a mark of treason.
ReplyDeleteThank you for the dedication, even though I am quite sure I haven't done anything to merit it. In return I do guarantee you at least one regular reader. :)
As for suggestions on reworking the poem, try swapping 'your' for 'thy'.
Thank you Sir for those comments!As always they were a delight to read because they are a precise analysis of whatever I write and bring forth ideas never intended and caution me against indiscriminate use of words.
DeleteAnd sir, you are too humble to admit the huge role you play in helping me come out with better works.Thank you for the guarantee that you'd read all my posts too!